Absolutely, undeniably gorgeous.

What a way to challenge a metaphor.

I really liked this. I don't understand it, but it made me a little uncomfortable--and I haven't read much here that evoke something real in me like the writhing discomfort I had.

I'll let you know when I have some tangible idea of it. Is this regret? Lust? Blood lust?

Hm.

I don't mean to be offensive but this is definitely not a way to win your lover back, especially with statements like "work better than before". If you really loved her, you'd love her for being herself. For the nice qualities and her flaws. You can't change someone to make them fit you better. You need to know that people do change for themselves and no one else, so unless she wanted to strengthen her weaknesses, she'd have to do it for herself. That's all i have to say...

Peace-kerr

...honestly...thats not only one of the most disgusting things Ive ever read...its not even a way to win someone over. If anything, thats a way to make the ones you love, barf in your face, and be too sick to wipe it up. Yeah, good luck with that one, like hell.- Amy Vahn

I'm sorry, just passing though when I saw my name on it, delete this if you want. "I will put you back together and you will work even better than before" why? I worked just fine before. You can cut me with your scalpel all you please, but you will never find what you seek. For all the answers were in my soul, something you cannot hold.

interesting... this Tammy must be very dear to you. I am curious as to if you ever got a chance to put her back together and find what you were looking for. Or did she take what was hers back from you to give to another?

You know I love this one. It's creepy in it's Lovecraftian/David Lynch sort of way. Twisted sick scientist meets Romantic. I love it!