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| Arrow's Flight 2008-06-09 ch 1,   | Nice. Your imagery in clear, concise, picturesque, and haunting. Kudos. |
| Nova-Janna 2006-03-08 ch 1, | I liked this a lot, more than the others of yours I've read now. (I've been reading up the list.) I liked the photograph metaphor a lot, especially with the line about airbrushing out imperfections. I don't know why, exactly, but this just flowed better and made me think, and I like it because of that. You made some very good points and portrayed emotion well. |
| catching-falling-stars 2005-05-02 ch 1, | gosh! this has to be the 3rd one i've read of yours. you are really good! i'm so jealous. i like the descripitive language in this. never stop writing! @_@ |
| beti213 2005-05-02 ch 1, | patchwork can easily be more beautiful than a "whole" fabric... I like the extended metaphor here, and especially the first two lines are poignant. You could probably have a stronger rhythmic sense here, but it really is optional-something to think about. I like it-keep writing! |