This was an incredible story. I was immediately sucked in and couldn't stop until I finished it in one sitting. I can't wait read the follow up story.

Great story! It's so well done that I feel I should be paying you money for the pleasure of reading it. LOL I thought the story was professionally executed in every respect, and my only constructive comment would concern the fact that I thought the pacing of the action in many instances (particularly during the escape) was a bit too slow and drawn out for my taste. But certainly, it didn't detract from my overall astonishment at finding such a fine effort in this archive,

Bravo and thanks for writing.

This story is so completely professional. And riveting. Did I mention *riveting*. LOL Bravo!

I'm enjoying this story so far. It is very well developed, and pulls the reader in. Bravo!

This is good enough to be published. The characters are believable, as well as loveable (meh, some of them aren't...) and the plot kind of has that misty mysterious feel about it that you'd expect to see in a published novel. I like it.

I was going to wait until the sequel was finished before I read it, but I'm getting impatient, so I decided I'd just go for it, any cliffhangers be darned.

Your story held me captivated for days. It was wonderful. You should try to get it published. You're a brilliant author.

Looking forward to starting the next part of the series.

Wow, I can't believe this story doesn't has more reviews. I admit, the beginning was a bit slow, but it was definitely worth it. Great story! I was so happy when Jimm showed up before they left >w< I'm off to read Mirren's Blood. Bye!

I really liked the depth of character shown in this chapter. It's not so much that Lara is such a deep character as that she's human, and you showed that very well. One thing that really irritates me about a lot of writing is the way that characters often have just one side, and it was really good to see that compassion there, to see a little bit of growth.

I'll just chuck in the mistakes I notice...if any!
Chapter 1, 2nd Paragraph; 'enthralled by the pattern IT was painting'
Chapter 3, 8th paragraph; 'the nobles must be lazier THAN he thought.'
paragraph 9; 'weariness turning his limbs into LEAD'
Chapter 4, para 18; 'as strong A contempt for it.'
oh and horses don't have fur, foxes and wolves do but horses have hair.
Chapter 5, near the bottom; 'hoping to restrain his temper for just A little longer.'
Chapter 6, almost half way; 'Marcus made a point of trailing his fingers through the dust on one of the window SILLS.'
Chapter 9, 2 thirds of the way down ish; 'Mirren shot Jimm AN affronted look'
Chapter 10, when describing Madame Lackay shouldn't it say 'the Evariste crest on her chest' rather than Evariste weapon?
The stallion - Neela feels a very feminine name to me, I keep forgetting that it is male.
Chapter 12, about half way Lord Jacobi speaking; 'It's got something to DO with blood.'
Then I got fed up with stopping to tell you and read the whole thing! :)

Nu har jag äntligen fattat att du är svensk och därför kommer kommentarerna i fel ordning, men så får det vara. Det blir lättare att kommenter på ett språk där jag har alla ord. Måste säga att jag är mycket imponerad av din engelska.
Din historia har en stor närvaro, den är nästan omöjlig att slita sig ifrån. Desutom gör du en massa ordvändningar och liknelser som är mitt i prick, en del av dem sådana där man väntar sig en kliché men du vänder dem till något nytt. Jag älskar sådant!

Wow. You certainly have a way with words. You turn them in ways I did not expect an I greatly appriciate that.
Much looking forward to the next part.

Can't wait for the next part.

yeah... things are starting to happen I'm excited!

Hm...sounds interesting... I like the summary a lot

Oh my goodness!It took 29 chapters but it was so worth it!I love how Jimm was just chasing Mirren and the lot down the street. I was in a happy giggling fit the whole chapter.

I'm so glad you chose this ending.I might have cried too if they didn't end up together.