i like :)especially "through dark and chrome // and the ride back home" (i know, rhyming doesn't make a poem, but it certainly helps) and "cover myself in blankets of colored paper" (even though i have no idea what you're refering to :)) good job

first of all, I loved the chemistry allusions. so beautiful. "singing like a polished angel"- that made me melt.

Beautiful detail and imagry, the abstract vein flowed through this with a wonderous power that drew me in. Amazing display of emotions. Keep up the good work.

much love,Juliet.