i love it!

isn't it that in regency england, if you commit murder you get hanged? even if you're a duke?

FANTASTIC JOB.

Dear God, *I* want to throttle Kate. We do not live in Regency England or anything, but I am pretty sure that my husband would have been more than a little pissed if I had cavorted and carried on flirting with a man he had warned me was a scoundrel while we were engaged. Of course, he has never warned me of anyone's scoundrel-hood...nor have I cavorted and carried on with anyone besides him. But back then, when everything was so strict and the smallest thing could ruin a woman, Kate is being awfully cavalier with her reputation. Especially since whatever her reputation is will reflect on her sister, and if nobody wants her, nobody will want her sister. You would think that a woman that is supposed to be intelligent would take the time to realize that Thomas, a man she grew up with, is warning her that Nathaniel is a rake, and Nathaniel is a man she has placed entirely too much trust and loyalty in considering she has known him for what, a week? I feel no loyalty to anyone until I am very close friends with them...someone I have known for not even a month would not qualify for my loyalty. I hope Anne just comes out and tells here sister what a moron she is being soon, because I would enjoy that.

Also, in an earlier chapter, when Anne and Kate go to get their dresses...the dress maker is supposed to be from France, right? Because the accent you have is a mix between French and German (saying "will" as "vill" would be German, not French...they pronounce "w" normally in France). Although I suppose she could have lived along the border and therefore had to be bilingual. There was something else, I think...but it cannot have been important if I d not remember it now. Cheers!

GillyBean

I KNEW IT! I KNEW IT! I knew that no good SOB Nathaniel was up to something when he wouldn't name the girl he was supposedly in love with. He's a sneaky little rat. *digust*

I'm glad things worked out in the end. Great story.

Wowzers! I read this a while back, but I seen it again the other day and decided to reread it. It's such a cute ficcy! Now I'm grinning like an idiot, as I usually do after reading a romantic story or seeing a romantic movie with a happy ending. BRAVOS to you!

I loved your story. It was extremely well written. The plotline was also very well done. Yeah, I sound like one of those old ladis or something. What I am trying to say is that: I loved your story completely! Totally amazing.

brava! i loved it; it was really well-written and entertaining and good luck with any attempts at publishing it cuz it is great!

i love your story thus far! i can't believe this new development though - it seems like it can only do harm. ah well, off to read the rest of the story!

Can't gallop in Hyde Park - 'tis forbidden.

You're structure, story, style of writing is all fantastic - I think it's just the odd detail where you make a mistake or two.

Very well written however.

x

"shove off" isn't a phrase used in regency england. Not sure about this but if Anne has come to almack's, I think she is already considered as out and wouldn't have a come-out ball afterwards.

Also, it is ALWAYS the girls who breaks of a marriage - if a man does it, he can be sued for a breach of promise, or even worse, damage his honour. Men never break an engagement - think sense and Sensibility and Edward.

very well-written, however.

The writing style is good, and the story content too. The language sometimes seems ill-matched to the Regency era - the bit at the end when she mentioned being stressed and the phrase geesh. Also, calling her a little touchy - it doesn't seem to fit in with the regency setting, somehow.

Overall though, it was fantastic!

That was so wonderfully sweet! So realistic it was and historically accurate that I could easily convince myself that this was an actual romance novel I was reading. - I love the way you touched upon the Regency period your own way, and how, repeatedly, Kate described the ton exactly how they are. (But I really do like the Regency period...and the concept of the ton).

However, I just wish Nathaniel wasn't such a vicious person! But, alas, it was a must. In the middle of the fic, I actually thought that "his lady" was actually Kate! ;. How horrible would THAT have been? ; But Nathaniel as a character is actually very well developed. And his character/viciousness perfectly plays on those psychopathic crazies that the Regency period of London seems to inspire. o_o; I mean...look at Jack the Ripper! X_x

Oh! But I do love a good romance...their trials and story just makes me love the Thomas/Kate pairing all the more. What they share with one another is so sweet...it makes me warm and fuzzy inside. _ And the ending dialogue, no matter how cliche, was so romantic! (I think all those romance novels made me a tad touched in the head...since when was I such a romantic? O.o)

And finally, I know EXACTLY who you're talking about in your author note! But I completly forgot his name! Greek Adonis, indeed! And I only remember that scene vividly, because I read this fic in one sitting! (Okay, okay, so I AM a bit touched in the head...18 chappies in one sitting? Must be a new record...) But just know that I couldn't stop reading because YOU created a fic this wonderful.

However, I am a bit taken with Jon...hopefully there'll be a fic about him...? Or maybe you can make this ficcy into a trilogy! 1st installment: Kate & Thomas (fwee!), 2nd installment: Anne & Fiona's brother, and 3rd installment...Jon and some random shmoe. - Just a thought...

hey! just thought i'd take a second and reveiew your story!

first of all, i'm a sucker for romance, so i'm looking forward to reading this one!

so far, i like what you've done, and the plot (although maybe not THE most unique) has caught my interest.

the only piece of criticsm i can think of which might help your writing is to take note of the phrases which seem a little out of place with the regency england setting. most of your writing flows well, but then it contrasts with the few sentences that don't fit the times. for instance most of your dialogue is a bit more formal than the modern vernacular, but take a look at this conversation between Kate and Anne: “Geesh, sorry,” she replied. “Someone’s being a little touchy.”

“Just leave it alone.”

“Fine.” We stood silently for a few moments.

“Sorry Anne, I’m just not in a good mood,” I apologized feeling guilty.

She regarded me silently. “It’s alright,” she finally said. “I’m feeling a little stressed too.”

in another chapter, the narrator describes kate's thoughts coming at her a "mile a minute". it just doesn't fit the rest of the setting, and even worse (i can hear my english teachers screaming at me) its a bit cliched!

ok i kno, i kno: i sound incredibly nit-picky, but with a story this good, you don't want minor details to take away from the readers overall impression!

but yea i think i've over-analyzed your writing a bit much and i do want to stress that i LIKE your story! keep workin at it!

im sorry, but i just have to say, that shouldn't she realize that its wrong for her to be engaged to one person but pretend that she in enamored with another? it would be ok if she wasn;t connected to Thomas, but since she is, she should realise that how wrong it is, what a scandal it could cause. I mean, in those times, it could not just wreck her image, but that of her siblings too, the people she cares most about.

sorry once again, thats the only aspect of this story that i strongly disaprove of. Other than that this story is coming along fantastically. It during one of my favorite ages and has proved to be a good read thus far.