I still wait for a update, I know you are on a hitus but I'm just letting you know that this story hasn't been forgotten either.

This is an ok chapter, nicely written and the grammer is up to your usual standard which is very good. And it seems your starting to get heavy into the issue of destiny. However is a part that has got me thinking: The part where the group are warned that there are others who will elinimate them. Even when Griffin asks if they could get more detail on who they and Frater Pietro says: “We are certain that they will make themselves known to you.”

That sentence alone suggests Pietro knows more then he's letting on which should be a worry and brings a contradtion over the whole freedom/fate issue. How can this group represent freedom and choose the right path when Pietro and the brethren dictates their actions? How be champions and be trusted upon when they were tested out of doubt? The group seems to be more of a tool for the brotherhood, going out on an errand like all heroes do and are to step aside when it is all over. If their path is to be dictated by this religous group then how can they say that the 'choice' in the fate of the world will be a 'free' one?

However one thing I'll note: Sachi was on horseback, so why not just ride away from her would be attackers? I'm guessing ou dilbertely wanted her to show off her fighting skill for she maybe a spy who wanted to get into the group swiftly (ie: passing by and just meeting some thugs who happen to serve as an example for her martial art skills to impress by conidence a group of destined heroes passing by)

Keep up the story.

Great chapter it reminded me of the film 'saw' did the whole prison sequence, an elabroate prison designed as an extreme means of test. It was great with the comments and the dialouge is creative. Though given the fear that one character of suffering claustiphobia, griffan almost being choked and the rest got out by the oure chance that Celdon was awake to guide them i would be a 'tad' bit more then just 'disapproving' the monk's bahviour. Espacilly for Celdon and griffan who are the two proffesional killers in the group and therefore will take a realistic (negative) sight into this.

I think this chapter would had been perfected had the group reacted in a defensive or offensive manner when they see the monks. That just seem to kill off the experince for the characters as they mostly shrug it off in a sentence or two afterwads.

Enter Sachi!! ^_^ I just love that girl!! Anyway, Xyr'lian should give her a break... Anyway, I do believe Celdon and Luna are becoming more and more adorable by the second... Griffin and Azdariel really amuse me too. I want to see more of those new characters, so make it a point of keeping the focus on them!

real life sucks. it ruins the imagination, which may i add, is what creatures such wonderful stories such as these, and if there were no such things as stories, i would die!

very nice!!

DUN DUN DAAHH!

suspense!! so Sachi may or may not be a fake, and the unnamed guy is able to control minds...

*hides under the desk*

:) CD

yassie! why?

ok, i admit that you did a really great job writing about that test those monks had for the fab five (i could actually picture how exactly everything was going like a movie in my mind, so kudos my dear friend!), BUT you can't make that a chapter on it's own!! i mean, you ended with the introduction of Finn (haha, i love the pun... it pays to have inside info, wehehe!) and Gavry (sounds like gravy... ^__^;) and THAT WAS IT! yassie, you can't do this to us... T_T truth to tell, i'd rather find out what happens next in your story than read the half blood prince (which i still haven't, pity me.. hehe!). naks! hanep na compliment ba? biased e! ^__~

The story is doing well, action paced, as always though it is apparent you are becoming dependent on sarcastic humour. Xyr’lian was the original source but now Griffin and Azdariel use it and that feels a bit much. Also the whole 'I’ve always thought that miners are always roaring drunk.' is a grotesque stereotype, still its based in a fantasy world but isn't something to help win an argument or is proof of suspicion.

Yet the diverse of the characters is well done but 'this legend that will decide the world' hasn't been hinted or referred too much since the prologue. I think more development on that would be needed as even at this stage it is still locked away with not much given to it personally.

Still if anything I'm reading the story out of the characters, their interaction and travelling makes it a read itself and I hope you continue.

I'm impressed, the story is very fluid in progression, though the history background of the story is rarely touched I do like the progression of the characters. Its also good to see that your tying up some bits such as putting back on Brother Balan after his time in prologue.

I have to say I'm likening Xyr’lian (how is his name pronounced exactly?) from a figure of command to slowly adjusting to life on sea. His remarks are good, however I feel his sarcastic remarks are a bit too obvious and seem to mock the layout of your world, which loosens the believability in it. I’m liking it so far and still reading it.

I liked the test, it was a good way to show all of their skills.

:) CD

very good chapter, I look forward to reading more. Thanks for pointing out my typos in my story...they really were typos...I promise!

I FINALLY READ IT ALL...and i absolutely loved it...it has pulled me in so much that i must keep reading it...this is so good, if i had more space it would be in facs...keep this up plz ^_^

hehe, haven't really read the chapter yet (you know how i hate reading stuff on the pc, so i'm still printing it... ^__~) but for that survey you're doing:

celdon! he's so adorably naive and honest! ^_^ makes you wanna just hug him. hehehe! oh, and that's not because he's based on carlos or anything. =P i'm happy with my babs. ^__~ oh, and i miss hanging out with you guys!

btw, i forgot to put this in my review for chapter 2:

stick to your theme. it was a bit awkward seeing the word "guy" in this story. it kinda ruins the ancient world-ish feel. maybe you could use "fellow" or some other word instead to keep with the over-all theme/setting?

but otherwise, i can't seem to find anything wrong. which is a really good thing, mind you. ^__^ i can't wait for my alter-ego to pop up next!

the oc-ness definitely shines through for azdariel! ^__^ i'm really enjoying the story na, keep updating!