I'm impressed. Your writing style is very interesting and it reads like poetry, almost. In my opinion there are a few too many unfinished sentences - the first couple are for good effect, but overusing this type of literary device interrupts the flow. Other than that, however, I think the descriptions and the emotions are fascinating. Good job :)

Aw

It had a good Rusian flavor to it, very heavy and introspective. It was a little choppy for me, and hard to follow with all the pauses and broken, cut off thoughts.I was glad she welcomed him back, he seemed a dark and broken fellow.

I love this story so far. Any thing about imperial or Soviet Russia really intrests me. And this is beautifly written Update soon please!

Lady Dawn