Reviews for The Alliteration Poem, or: The Change

Reviews For: The Alliteration Poem, or: The Change

Sharakinpaix 2005-07-01 ch 1,	abuseHey Je-Nie-Dieu! I loved the whimsical feel of this poem, the alliterations, the assonance, and all the new vocab words I learned, thank you! By the way, do you speak French? First there was "Je nie Dieu" and now Merde!? Haha... I'm just wondering, cuz I grew up in Quebec... I especially loved "salve on salvo swaths," and after going to Dictionary.com, I realized you were using the term "swath" as in "cut a swath," or making an impression. It's so cool that you also used "cut" with "salve," as if the cut was a real wound of... vanity? That's where I got stuck... I also don't know what the Great reason is... is it a religious reference? Yech! That was a strong image: mortared lips. It's very true of lovestruck people, what is said in the parentheses. You did a great job, making this lend so much to the whimsical feel here, when you're referring to the human tendency to make everything mean something. I was a bit stuck on the second stanza... "What the hell could that lead to?" Were you referring to "palace pimping?" Haha... Write on, Monsieur Je Nie Dieu!
i was a postcard 2005-05-03 ch 1,	abusei love alliteration! haha. I just love that first line..."The wind in Whitman's window..." The 6th stanza was my favorite.
wordsworth in a garbage can 2005-05-03 ch 1,	abuseYou think I'm wonderful? Oh wow. Not even in my wildest dreams could I ever write like this. so many great lines, "such a summer of smiles"- you know, if someone read this, I don't see why they wouldn't be at your beckoncall 24-7. thank you so much for the reviews and the thing in your profile. how odd! I wrote a poem mentioning Whitman last week. perhaps he's haunting around.
jctstorage 2005-05-03 ch 1,	abuseI think if I tried reading this out loud my mouth would fall off. Great fun! :)
Rose of Darkness 666 2005-05-03 ch 1,	abuseWow, the alliteration here is WAY too much...But some of the images are nice, like "That is enough when all of your green shoots and moist redemptions/Poke free of the starched, parched earth." That's awsome. Just way too much alliteration.
nine iron 2005-05-03 ch 1,	abuseYour certainly have a great grasp of the style you have so well used here. Nine Iron

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