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| music-rocks-my-world 2005-05-09 ch 1,   | I loved it. You kept the message and the rhyming sceme in check. Thumbs up! |
| brown crayon 2005-05-03 ch 1, | Wow, this is brilliant, i love the idea and the ryhme works really well. |
| account not in use 2005-05-03 ch 1, | The ryhme and flow are excellent. It seems a bit awkward in places. I love the idea, and the way you worded it was really good. |
| Faithless Juliet 2005-05-03 ch 1, | Powerful, I love the metaphore that you create in the first two lines. It was amazing, I never would have approched this topic from that angle. Wonderful, keep up the good work. Much love,Juliet. |