How very mature...I never thought of lightening as a thing to fear, a thing to fret...something to hope never has to happen...I always believed that lightening was an expresion of extreme emotion, but never such a drastic one...well, you may interperet such natural phenomena differently than I...good job and keep writing!

~Single Black Rose Slinky717@aol.com

I like the conversation with yourself in this poem, it makes me smile when I read it.

the metaphor is very well used~~ imagery is good as well~~

keep writing!

Beautiful, descriptive...I loved it!

a very good aim- to inspire peoplethispoemhas very good rhythm well done

all of your writing conveys a very unsatisfied tone, as if you've seen life and just aren't happy with everything that happens. Like you want something more, but know you wont ever get it.

It really begs the question, Have you ever been in love?

Love can change a persons outlook like no other, let me tell you.

or rather let me not tell you, the stuff goes beyond words.

But enough about that, This was good. It's nice to see another person who uses figurative language.

Although if i were you i'd use metaphor rather than simile, it cuts out weak works "like" "as if" and at the same time leaves the reader pleasantly confused.

That's just me though, simile is good stuff in its own ways as well.

*cheers* This is awsome! I love it...it's amazing...i love the concept, it's original...keep it up. ^_^--pammy-

Hey cool! This could almost be a short storyish thing.