 Clap Clap Raise Your Hands 2005-06-05 . chapter 1cool, very beautiful, i love the part about them singing, seems original. i quite like your poem in one big stanza really, but i dont know how to break up stanzas here, i just put -- in the gap between stanzas, much easier! (hope that makes sense, have a look see how i structure mine!) great work, the picture must have been amazingly pretty to inspire this x weasel within x |
 Getuie 2005-05-31 . chapter 1This poem is interesting it the thoughts it brings to me. It definitely has a light touch to it, and interesting rhythm.
People, to me, are much like roses. They have a beauty and fragility (is that a word??) to them, but they also have the protection of thorns. Sometimes you get the thorns more than the flower, but anyway.
With that image in mind, I especially liked the last few lines:"In the quiet wood, a fragile rose,Flooded with shimmering light,Stands still in twilight’s calm repose,In defiance of the night."
May we all stand in that defiance. |