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swaggering curses 2005-05-09 . chapter 1
I love the line "Words lost in the creases." The entire poem has some beatiful description, just enough to make it interesting without going overboard. I think that in the first line, if you're going to keep verb tenses consistent, it should be "he chooses" instead of "he chose"? Unless that was deliberate. But. Awesome! =)
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