Interesting story, you've left it open for a sequel and I'm curious to see if you will write one. Thank you for reviewing my story! I thought I'd pay you back the kindness by doing what you asked me to do, so I reviewed one of your stories. You're good at writing! Well, au revoir!

Hey - The story's good and everything... but I think you've updated to the wrong story! ;) don't worry I've done it too...

Ok, weird, but excellent. The story has volume, and like I stated before, it really is intriguing. All I can really say is WOW! If you don't mind would you review my story? I could use some pointers.

Excellent writing style. This story absorbed me into this world you have created. I am intrigued and I hope you choose to update this. This material is some the best I have seen on this website.

Whee! *dances* you updated! ^^ Cool chapter once again. Hope you updates soon!

Kchan

Whew! First off I'd like to say sorry for not reviewing for a while! ^^ I really am, cause I was missing out on a cool story like this! You're definitely developing well as a writer, as shown by your lovely descriptions (so I'm a detail nut. Sue me :3)and the emotion you put into it. Maybe its the first person POV? That almost always encourages writers to put in more detail, and of course, emotion. ^^ Over all, love it! Update? *puppydog eyes*

Kchan

i alread told you that i liked the contrast between Mika and Ray and this chapter just develops that more, i think chapter is amazing the emotion wow. oh who is this girl right at the end you have to keep writing please i have to no. i have placed this story in my favs . keep writing.

laura

WoW... update soon, this sounds really good. Little bit of constructive criticism for you cos hey - we all know reviews are great but helpful reviews are better!!: Try linking some of your sentences, making them a little more complex - I know it's difficult when you have a lot of description, but reading sentence after sentence of complete description can sound a little wierd.

I love the idea of God and Goddess of the sun - though I WAS worried when Athena turned up that she was Ray's other girlfriend or something... please update and I'm going to try and read your other story now - might be a while before I review it though I'm a bit wierd like that.

~ bye!

First off, I would like to say that you are a very descriptive writer. I like how you describe their emotions, the sky, and practically everything. This is a very clever idea and I hope that you put up more chapters soon.

This is great! The language and descriptions are way beyond what an eleven year old should know. My sisters are eleven and they wouldn't know most of the words you use here. Heck i'm 16 and i don't know half of the worlds you have used. The language is really advanced.I think the story is pretty cool as well, it leaves you at the end wnting to know what he's said. I usually leave a criticism for people on every review i write but i really can't think of anything to criticise in your work. Keep it up!

oh please update! It's brilliantly realistic and really well written - can't wait for the next chapter *hint hint* :-D

you are a fantasic writer, when i read your words i felt as if i was there feel and seeing it all myself. i like how you deeply descibed every thing using vivid colours. you are an excellent writer and i can not wait to read the rest of your story.

p.s. thanks for reviewing my poem. laura

Hi! Thanks so much for reviewing my fic! And as for yours, this looks promising. A romance that will have a happy ending I hope? ^_^ I'll be looking forward to your next chapters!

Great start, considering your age. You're quite talented. You put many great details in this, better than many writers older than you, wow. Normally I don't go for the straight pairings, but you wrote so beautifully and it's not going to get...detailed, so I shall be back to read.

Morbid Maxwell-Come to the darkside, we've got yaoi!