Good luck with your life by the way...

It was descriptive where it was supposed to be descriptive, and constantly moving. Didn't seem too ponderous, but it was thought-provoking. Good Job.

-Stardust.

This is really good. Its just a little confusing in the beginning. She could be a ghost or a person thats about too die. But its good and I like the end!

Oh I like this. Very vivid in description and colourful in the language you use. Well done with this!

Hot damn! That was amazing. I don't think I've ever sat through a story that long on FP (it's the ADD ;P), but that one was captivating beyond measure. Your writing style, your bold topics, the detail of those bold topics (you know, like the skull being blown apart), and the absolute beauty of the abstract quality to it all - absolutely brilliant. Did "Cries of a Mortuary" really help you form the idea for this? If so, I must say I am quite honored. This story was amazing. Keep it up.

Yeap, the new editor is driving me insane as well. :)

I liked it. Sad, with a feeling of utter loneliness coming through the words. I also loved the gory details, but I suppose you expected that. ;)

A couple of things I noticed:

*I didn’t like it*. Here, you might want to say "did not", so the emphasis would go on "not". Just a thought. :)

*A cold tear ran down my cheek* I hope I won't offend you, but I consider "single tears" a major fiction stereotype. Why not just say "cold tears"?

Apart from that, a very powerful piece. Good work.

Aw, that was sweet. *hugs*

~DoA