Reviews for Rays of Imagination

Reviews For: Rays of Imagination

Appaloosa05 2006-03-30 ch 1,	abuseI enjoyed this story. It was suspenseful until the end, laced with the sort of mystery that keeps you guessing. At first your style felt a little forced, as if maybe you were trying something you weren't entirely comfortable with but I settled into it shortly. It may just be that I'm not used to reading this particular style. There were one or two sentences I feel could be improved upon. The first thoroughly confused me. I stood up and placed the thin book back onto the shelf, noting curiously as I did so that no poet's name graced the cover, and satagainto lean into my leather lounge chair. What does satagainto mean? I don't think I've ever seen that word before so unless I'm simply dense (which is entirely possible) it probably left others confused as well. Secondly the word through is repetitive here. bluish daylight cast its rays through the window through the raindrops If there's any other word you can think of that would fit I would suggest using it. I can't think of anything at the moment though. I like your voice, and the reflective feel of this story. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
ice flyer 2005-09-17 ch 1,	abusei love the last line, i just love it. this reminds me..i know it's weird..of edgar allan poe, in a way. not the plot or anything, just sort of an obscure stylistic similarity..anyways. hope you had some good luck on getting it published!
ADSpencer 2005-09-13 ch 1,	abuseThis is wonderful. Nice ending!
mwegan 2005-09-02 ch 1,	abuseWow, that was a good ending. Hard to do with the cliche 'it was all a dream' kind of thing. Well done. I like how the whole story had that kind of blurry dreamlike quality to it. How did this story make me feel? Jealous - why can't I write this well...
DAR 2005-08-25 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow, this is an incredibly powerful piece. The descriptions are beautiful, and the last line is absolutely perfect. I love it!~Dream and Reap
Aryanda 2005-08-19 ch 1,	abuseOh, this is really good. It made me think, which is quite an accomplishment (and if my teachers come aknocking on your door wondering how you did it, don't tell them!) and it made me wonder why we think our life has to be over when we're young? i mean, the average lifespan of an American is around 80 or so, so if at 15-20 something years we think we've accomplished something great and good and we don't need education or anyone or anything else, how will that effect the rest of our lives? what happens when we don't take the time to wonder 'what if' and test life to the fullest? do we all end up crabby old people yelling for our applejuice and not giving a care in the world when the girl scouts come to sing christmas carols? ...um, sorry i kinda ranted. didn't mean to do that. back to the story- i liked the last line because it shows what can be. the poem was really good too, and the descriptions were fantastic, especially when the old man was turning into a young man again. overall, this story rocks. you're a great author; i hope you write more like this.
Kimmi Gray 2005-08-17 ch 1,	abuseThis was awesome. Bravo. In my opinon I think it was seamless and talk about a twist.
Nanners 2005-07-06 ch 1,	abuseOh, I liked this a lot. The writing style took a bit of getting used to, it was very unique. A lot like my own writing style, in fact--not many people, fictional or real, write like that, but who cares, I think it's fun. :) I should definately re-read this to get the full effect, because I'm sure it's saying many things I've missed because of the writing style (formal, I've decided, is the proper word. It sounds very formal) and I think I WILL re-read it, but some other time, because it would probably mealt my brain to read it again in so breif a span of time. But what I DID get out of it was that imagination is an escape. Was that right, or did I get it wrong? Can you interpret things wrongly? Maybe not the same as the author did, but is there actually a WRONG interpretation to anything? I am so easily side tracked. If I go on with this review, I'll ramble endlessly, and a lot of the rambling will be pointless. I guess I'll just say that I liked this A LOT, I really did. This style of writing, I find, doesn't work for many characters, even characters you don't know (which is why I try to avoid first person unless I'm writing as an educated or elderly person!) but it worked quite well in this case, and I'm impressed. The ending was really good, too. And...that's all. Au revoir!
Fallen Corrupted Angel 2005-06-30 ch 1,	abuseI always seem to have something to say but after reading you story I am left rather... speechless shall I say?Please look on that with good light because I am in awe at your talent and your ability you be able to have a story that flows out of you so simply and so easily.Thank you for that story. I cheered me up and it affected me in a different way, from how it would affect another to say the least. Inspiration must sprout out of you ears and words out of your fingers.
MistyEyes 2005-05-12 ch 1,	abuseOh, I liked that ending. Really nice. Your talent at description boggles my mind. @_@ Aka, you're really good at it, but I'm sure you already knew that. If you didn't... shame. Shame, shame, shame on you.
Paige Angel Lenaigh 2005-05-12 ch 1,	abuseMy mouth fell open at the last line... I loved it! At forst i thought the old man became young again then you basically smacked me in the face when you told me it was just a dream. I like suprises when I can figure them out at my own leisure and that suprise was good. I found myself hoping that it wouldn't end because I wanted more but I wouldn't have you make it any longer because it fit perfectly. Keep up the good work... Just behind you... Natalie
Timberly-Lovegood 2005-05-11 ch 1,	abuseAh...so he's going to write that book that hasn't been written yet! hah good stuff. The dream on the other hand was quite...hmm i think i misunderstood the point for it...oh well. Hah oh and i liked your summary about the 9 year olds. Heh.
Guinivere Sage 2005-05-11 ch 1,	abuseInspiration... that is what he had. That is what he dreamed about, and that is what sparked this story. There are so many aspects to this I can hardly know where to start. The beginning was quite interesting. At first, when I did not yet grasp the direction the story would take, I noted how the old man became paranoid after reading the poem. He viewed everything with a distinct harshness that had not been there before. I wondered if that was an effect of his reading the poem. The rain, I believe, is an interesting variable in the story. The reader does not know what will happen next, and though I feel there may be some hidden message behind it, I can't grasp it. Then again, it could just be my overactive imagination. When the man begins to go back in time, I'm assuming the old man is watching his own life in rewind, and as the old man is the man having the dream, it creates to me an intriguing prospect that a person can see into their own future. Then again, it could be that the entire dream is just conjecture. The book not yet written is genius. I totally didn't see it coming. Once again, you need an editor. There were a few instances where a mistake really threw me out of the story, and I hate when that happens because I want to be able to pour myself into the plot and really try to figure out what's going on. Keep writing, keep learning, and keep coming up with great ideas. Oh yeah, and finish Chapter 10! ~GS~

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