love the last line. excellent poem this one is. tops.

very good...i like it

whoa, that's just so good it blows my mind away, your ability to put yourself in someone's shoes, someone who is in such a situation, is just amazing. It's like you put their thoughts on paper, or in a computer in this case - keep it up

I liked it, it was almost Nellie McKay in a way. any doubts I may have had were blown away by this.