kAIT REDFERN
2005-07-24
ch 1,  | abuseI like people observing but not to that extent. You wrote the various characters really well using different types of language and speech accordingly. You really felt like the teenages were teenages and the posh people were posh- everything was handled really well. Good use of figurative language and her revelation at the made made my heart go out to her. Although I liked how you put certain words in bold- I wondered if there was sometimes a reason for selecting a particular word or if it was just random? Anyway, this very was well written. Luv Kait |
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