Short. Very short. But it's not poorly written, so nothing but so say, really. Except you had "Bu" instead of "But" once. lol, that made me laugh.

You really should repost it, and update it too. That'd be swell ;)

I was very interested in this story, but I see that you haven’t updated for a long time. I liked how descriptive you were, without ranting. And I liked how the two characters seem forced together and yet they have completely opposite wants. But, I agree with Larania Mahera. I was completely reminded of Sephiroth, as well as many other characters that seem to be popping up lately.

Very short but interesting. It grabs the attention of the reader and makes them curious about what is going to happen next. The only thing I don't like is that the guy's hair makes me think of Sephiroth from Final Fantasy 7 but that's probably just me.