It is too bad you haven't updated in awhile. I really enjoyed this story so far, well I enjoy all your stories. hopefully there will be an update some time in the future. I don't really know if you'll get this, but if you do maybe it'll inspire you to write more :]. You're a very good writer, I just thought you should know that. Happy holidays.

overall very good.. the plot is really good but there were a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes that should be fixed

you've got a good grasp on the situation and people's emotions- the atrguments and such.

hopefully your muse sticks around. i see you've started another story and i'll be sure to check it out.

btw, have you forgotten me again? or moreso my now completed story?

such a sad sad chapter...update soon!

I can understand Nate being emotional and I can also understand his insecurities. Now he can't walk of course he is scared of losing Lynne because he feels there are better people for her... But he does need to sort himself out and lose some of the paranoia. I guess he can't find a way to talk to Lynne about it without being rude. He's using that as a shield and it is hurting people around him...

But of course, you already knew this. ;) I just like to express my thoughts in a review. Great chapter and update this and ITE as soon as possible.

I'm glad a new chapter is finally up, and a good one at that. I'm anxious to know what happens next. Jake is a sweetie, a true friend. Hopefully things will work out between Lynne and Nate...they better! :DGood luck with your muse, I know the feeling, lol.

Do you absolutely HAVE to leave it there? Oh my gosh I'm gonna die! Why do you have to leave your story there? Why not the whole story? Just kidding...bout the whole story thing...but not anything else before that...I love this story so much! So update soon! Hopefully your muse does come back to you...

I like the idea. It's orginal and shows a different kind of hardship in love. I like it! Update as soon as you can!

Double ditto!

Ditto!

Hello! Ah, girl! Typos aside, what were you worried about! Good story you've got going here! I can practically see the movie in progress! Keep it up!

Sad...great story though! PLEASE continue it son!

This was really good. When I write stories, it seems like phantasy because nobody's life could ever be that perfect, but yours actually seems like it could happen. Keep it up.

Much better chapter. This story is showing true promise. Very emotional, very well written.

"Lynne was shocked to hear his sudden outburst, but it was also a relieve." - "but it was also a relief" or "but she was also relieved."

But as I was saying, good chapter. I loved the scene at the end when they cried together.

god you almost made me cry. well there was tears. extremely well written. i love it. can't wait to see where you're going to go with this story.