*sniffs* love it

loved the mix of english and japanese - even though i dont know what it meant

This is good, I especially like the last stanza. It just seemed like exactly what needed to happen and the whole poem had been building up to it randomly, if that makes sense. I also like phrase "Denials don't ring true/I just wanna die". It feels like someone digging deep and facing up to what they find. And I actually liked the translation of the Japanese. The part about loving but disliking someone - that was good. Sorry this review was really dumb. The poem was good, I just can't write about poetry.

*sniff*this is a very powerfully sad and poignant poem full of heartache...

Oh how depressing! I loved it though. ^_^ My favorite had to be the first stanza. And yeah - rock on with the Japanese.

Peace out!...

First thing I noticed was that I love the first two verses. Then I liked the third verse the best!! I got lost in the Japanese the way I always do, but the rest of this would make a really good song. Makes me feel like writing music for it...