|Reviews for In Jerusalem|
| Relayer 5/18/05 . chapter 1
Very vivid, powerful imagery.
| schwartzcaster 5/18/05 . chapter 1
I really loved this. The moment where you compared the forehead kiss to your grandfather's was great. It sort of stepped out of the lofty poetic and grounded it at home. Nicely done.
| Saint Sade 5/15/05 . chapter 1
I like this a lot. Definitely going on my favorites list.
| lyingdreamer 5/14/05 . chapter 1
Very powerful visage of a mixed blessing.
| Nobody-n-Particular 5/14/05 . chapter 1
Powerful in expression of lost faith and betrayal. Beautiful with references to the grandfather.
| Tabi Berkey 5/14/05 . chapter 1
*awe**amazement* that was absolutley wonderful and amazing...
| cynicaldays 5/13/05 . chapter 1
you always end your poetry with a very abrupt line that almost contradicts the message you've been coveying the entire time
"i see god but also what he kills""I like that you have an opinion but know that i do not agree""i want to find go but i know that he is not there.""but as always it is just a dream"
You have a very distinguished to write; continue to amaze; continue to bless.
| Princess-anna57 5/13/05 . chapter 1
You are seriously one of the most amazing writers on Fictionpress! This poem is so good! I love it! Keep writing; you have SO much talent!Thank you very much for reviewing me by the way!
| LiKePiNk 5/13/05 . chapter 1
Very nice poem. I like the balance between shorter, choppier lines and the longer lines. This sounds like a very touching and very inspiring poem. Good job, and thanks for your review!
| Choke on this 5/13/05 . chapter 1
strong piece, incredibly written - love the last lines
| simpleplan13 5/13/05 . chapter 1
| boy that you loved 5/13/05 . chapter 1
the moans of men, seep towards you through the grave dust and beckon. towards the world of false ideals, tainted idols and the one true.
'aptmyn, aptmyd, aptmyae, batditwwshfh'
| Alexander Core 5/13/05 . chapter 1
| Adonia Chesser 5/12/05 . chapter 1
A tramendously well written poem, it sounded a little bit like "Kingdom of Heaven" But it had a great feeling to it. I noticed that spelt "God" with a lower case "g". You should try to remember to spell it with a Capatalized "G". Anyway, great poem, and don't stop the great work.
| Twigstudios1972 5/12/05 . chapter 1
Classic. Enuff said.