 Skitty Pink 2008-11-10 . chapter 1There was something really sad and yet beautiful about this. i loved it. |
 Kitty Cat Turtle 2008-03-20 . chapter 1This poem just speaks so clearly towards a real-life experience, it nearly made me cry. Very nice. |
 relapse into change 2007-10-08 . chapter 1beautiful.. |
 Jessica 2007-05-09 . chapter 1 Really great poem! It's extremely perceptive how well you've captured what could be anyone's insecurities about relationships: trust. The way he rambles in an elegant way and the way he battles with himself and his feelings, it's very biographical...
Actually, I don't really know what I'm saying right now; you kind of rendered me speechless because it was so beautiful. Vague in its simplicity, anyone could read it and say with certainty that you are writing about them; that is how great this piece is! Great job! ^__^ |
 cursive love 2006-01-22 . chapter 1Ha, that's exactly what I do in relationships. |
 Zetsuya 2005-11-02 . chapter 1I love this. I think it's a very beautiful poem. Excellent work. ^_^
Zetsuya |
 pneumothorax 2005-05-16 . chapter 1The Stanza length deteriorates towards the end. Splitting "To Feel. To Love." worked well so when on reading they were more predominant. The two stanzas after this eare examples of shrunken stanzas.
The: You don’t know why he stays..." Stanza worked well as a background/summing up of feeling. I liked the "You call for him in your sleep," stanza. Nice imagery. Almost contradictory in emotions, wanting but not wanting to be hurt. Good job but because of the stanza size, it meant it didn't read as well as possibly could have done. |
 Naomi Schemer 2005-05-15 . chapter 1This poem almost made me cry for some reason. It just hits so close to home. Awsome, awful poem. |
 Jeoal 2005-05-15 . chapter 1I thought that this was truly beautiful when I read it, Amy. I guess I should have known that someone as talented as you at story-telling would also be a wonderful poet. :-)
I especially loved how it started. The "Roses are for women" line was sweet and so very vulnerable (to me, at least). I came to the end wanting him not to push his lover away; but I suppose that sometimes things just hurt too much, and it's hard to overcome them. The piece almost reminds me of WMS, with Clyde continuously pushing Sam away, and Sam always coming back, never letting him go. ...Yet all Clyde wants is to not be hurt again.
But hey, enough of my observations. Stunning piece! So amazingly stunning. |
 Ree 2005-05-15 . chapter 1 It's hard to write novel-length reviews on poems, simply because the subject matter is so short, but I'd still like to comment. This is awesome. YOU are awesome. I forgot you were a poet as well. But, I mean, if you're good at writing, why not poetry? Poetry is just ... COMPACT prose. Therefore, this is compact awesomeness.
Awesomeness in its finest form, I'd say. *hands you a big gold star* |
 aeolyn 2005-05-14 . chapter 1Oh wow, I really liked this poem. It's one of your best poems yet, I think. So sad, especially the end! I feel like I'm gonna cry now. Kudos ^_^ |
 Widom 2005-05-13 . chapter 1Oh my ** god, PirateGrrl, that is just SO wonderful, and so sad, and I love it. *tears* Choke...sob...choke... just so beautiful. I love the sadness. |
 Kitzuke 2005-05-13 . chapter 1 Love the poem. ^^ I wonder though, does this have anything to do with 'WMSmoker seeks Seclusion'? Oh well. |
 birleywhirligig 2005-05-13 . chapter 1This poem is so sad... I blame you for sniffles now... I love this poem!! |