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| simpleplan13 2005-11-12 ch 12,  | abusepowerful |
| simpleplan13 2005-11-05 ch 11, | abusenice job.. i took your friends quiz & i got a 30.. lol the worst so far! |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-10-10 ch 10, | abuseAH, yes. |
| THROUGHTHESEEYES 2005-09-23 ch 10, | abuseI didn't realize...what's with the title? |
| linaeve 2005-09-22 ch 7, | abusekeep them away from the factory system indeed. |
| Enki 2005-07-26 ch 9, | abuseI don't usually read poetry, but I really like this work! :D The different thoughts all surrounding a main theme were interesting and well written, very good stuff |
| xo-lilacsxandxlolita-ox 2005-07-24 ch 2, | abuseThis was a wonderful poem that you've dedicated to about the learning experience, and I have to say that your poems have a wide kaleidoscope of both meaning and topics conveyed within their telling. The very first question that you pose in the very first line and stanza is a wonderful hook to lure your readers in...after all, how can order and learning exist together when both of them are completely different things. Order is too constraining, and when you organize something in what it's generally supposed to be, you're actually killing off any creative merit that it once had. Learning should be a more spontaneous experience, and you can't really put order into something like that. What schools don't teach student is the important things, like how to cope with life or about the learning process itself properly. The last stanza was a wonderful finish, and it was definitely a beautiful, poignant line. Your poems have wonderful meanings, and I think that many people can learn useful things off of this poem, especially about the learning process itself in this poem. Unschooling is a brilliant way to describe it, actually. Wonderful job on this one, as expected. Heather |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-10 ch 9, | abuseVery motivating. Something to post on the fridge or frame on the wall so one looks at it everyday and finds a source of purpose. |
| s m e l l . o f . r a i n 2005-05-29 ch 6, | abuse(Princess-anna57’s Renga—Teacher)Nice. The points and ideas you've touched here are so true... Whcih amde me like this poem. The middle two stanzas really made me think. "How can you teach mind/When heart is feeling bitter" was demanding an answer and thought-provoking, as was "Smile for each person/So effortless to gift this/Wrapping up mind's joy". Well done. =) |
| simpleplan13 2005-05-29 ch 8, | abuseinteresting.. nice job |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-05-26 ch 8, | abuseSplendid viewpoints. Inspiring. |
| simpleplan13 2005-05-26 ch 7, | abusevery nice |
| white-clouds 2005-05-26 ch 6, | abuseNice |
| white-clouds 2005-05-26 ch 3, | abuseWonderful story told here. |
| daphnegray78 2005-05-25 ch 7, | abuseI agree with this wholeheartedly. I was homeschooled for a year and a half, until my mother got a job with which she could no longer teach us. I've missed it ever since. Public schools are designed to impress upon students one way of thinking, one way of retaining information. It's hard for creative thinking and learning to blosom in such an environment. Of course, a few teachers help to alleviate the "factory system dull" with their outside-the-box thinking... but I would still give anything to have stayed in homeschooling. Now that I'm done with my tangent, perhaps I should mention the fact that, subject matter aside, I really like this poem. Your descriptions were accurate and wonderful. Well done. ~Daphne~ |