I've got to say, this seems excellent - certainly on a par with your fanfiction work.

I like the way you've made the character believable and interesting, and I hope you can extend this to the plot. I hate reading stories with developed characters but only half-baked plots.

My only hope would be for some more on that conversation with Steve. It would help for a bit more depth to Danny's character, and show his relations with his friends.

Apart from that, all I can say is continue - and I hope to read more soon.

Hm... interesting. I'll have to come back and read more of this after work, along with checking out your other stories...

that was awesome! i want to hear more... it is really intregueing (no idea how to spell that) urm... yah, i loved it.

This story is great, plot is awesome and Damon is a great character. I've read what you've done with Neurovision so far and it's great as well. Keep it up.

You...you put my name on this page?? OMG!! I feel so special...sniff...thank you so much...

What the hell happened to his wings? They - disappeared!! This is so cool...and so intriguing...*please* update soon!! It's great!!

Lol I have neurovision on my Author Alerts, don't worry about that. Can't wait for you to update again!

WHOA. Now THAT was impressive. Oh, come on, update already! I wanna see what happens next! Just don't say that he falls and dies, that'll be the dumbest way to end this story ever!

Lol! I did so much like this story. If I wasn't outright laughing, I smiled the whole time. Damon is very likable and humorous - I can't wait for an update.

Please, add more. This is one I'll add to my favorites. ^^

Great chapter. Love the fact that Damon was a "late bloomer." Ethrial. Awesome name for a race.

You've got a nice start, I believe. I just think that it could perhaps be a little more clear to know more about Damon himself. Like, before this talk he has with Jerry. But other than that, I think it's a good start, and hey man, if you've got ideas, then definately continue with it. ^_^

I like this start so far and the way you discribe everything, like Uncle Jerry and how you discibed more than just his physical appearence, but his personality too.

The story reminds me a bit of Superman, or at least the paragraph starting with "That spurred my mind even more" and the fact that Jerry isn't his real uncle and the fact that he's not from earth. But that outlook would probably change if you do continue this story. You wil, won't you?

Anyway, great job on the first chapter.