This is a pretty cool poem. But, remember, I is capitalized. Sorry. Had to tell you. But yes the poem is a really cool one.

excellent.

god forbid i say something positive about the last lines at this point.

Very despondent and heart-hitting. It's beautiful and lonely. I know- wistful.

-jess

Wow. Last two lines really grabbed me.

chilling. "where was i/your lover boy/when you decided to paint the highway/with yourself" ... absolutely perfect clincher. couldn't have ended it better.

-salt.

love it. it reads extremely well. sad,yes, but it is very very good.

oh, wow. sad, but, you've got to be a literary genius. the last two lines are just...amazing. scratch that, EVERYTHING YOU WRITE IS AMAZING.

I used to be one of those long review whores.

I love the last few lines:"when you decided to paint the highway/with yourself"

Quite perfect really. The disloacting the "with yourself" from the former, gave it that extra oomph, an added complacent sadness. Cool, kudos.

the last two lines are-- wow, so original.

i love your use of informal language, the way you describe a harsh situation with harsh words, the way you let something ugly and sad be ugly and sad without romanticizing it. Very well written

so the inspirations were lost on me- but miss insomnia? my god. you are too brilliant.

aww. sweet.

woa... creepy!!

i like the way the beginning is odd and the end sounds unintentional, though.

so poignant. i can completely relate to the frustration and feeling of insufficiency in first stanza