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| tesa131313 2006-12-09 ch 1,  | abuseThis is a pretty cool poem. But, remember, I is capitalized. Sorry. Had to tell you. But yes the poem is a really cool one. |
| in tesseraction 2005-08-30 ch 1, | abuseexcellent. god forbid i say something positive about the last lines at this point. |
| breakdown in the waiting ro... 2005-08-22 ch 1, | abuseVery despondent and heart-hitting. It's beautiful and lonely. I know- wistful. -jess |
| Mestre 2005-07-12 ch 1, | abuseWow. Last two lines really grabbed me. |
| AboveTheSalt 2005-06-19 ch 1, | abusechilling. "where was i/your lover boy/when you decided to paint the highway/with yourself" ... absolutely perfect clincher. couldn't have ended it better. -salt. |
| violetsky23 2005-06-17 ch 1, | abuselove it. it reads extremely well. sad,yes, but it is very very good. |
| KonekOniko 2005-06-05 ch 1, | abuseoh, wow. sad, but, you've got to be a literary genius. the last two lines are just...amazing. scratch that, EVERYTHING YOU WRITE IS AMAZING. |
| Dirty Wallpaper 2005-06-03 ch 1, | abuseI used to be one of those long review whores. I love the last few lines:"when you decided to paint the highway/with yourself" Quite perfect really. The disloacting the "with yourself" from the former, gave it that extra oomph, an added complacent sadness. Cool, kudos. |
| and flowers 2005-06-01 ch 1, | abusethe last two lines are-- wow, so original. |
| WiredWords 2005-05-31 ch 1, | abusei love your use of informal language, the way you describe a harsh situation with harsh words, the way you let something ugly and sad be ugly and sad without romanticizing it. Very well written |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2005-05-28 ch 1, | abuseso the inspirations were lost on me- but miss insomnia? my god. you are too brilliant. |
| vionna 2005-05-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseaww. sweet. |
| hypocrite extrodinare 2005-05-21 ch 1, | abusewoa... creepy!! |
| guiter pickless 2005-05-20 ch 1, anon. | abusei like the way the beginning is odd and the end sounds unintentional, though. |
| W3DNESDAY 2005-05-17 ch 1, | abuseso poignant. i can completely relate to the frustration and feeling of insufficiency in first stanza |