This was really cool! I love dragons! Keep writing! ^.^

Warning: This will probably be a long review.

First off, there are quite a few typos on this. Spell check and people like me, who are completely insane about this type of thing, are usually helpful in this department. Being lazy, I am not going to point out every single mistake. Just run it through spell check and scan through it. Read it aloud, or have someone read it to you, word for word. That usually works for me, as far as typos go.

Also, in some places, the word choice or the sentence structure is extremely awkward. For example:

"Both Jen and Conith screamed out Jian’s name both unexpected that she would jump off"

would probably sound better:

"both Jen and Conith screamed out Jian's name, neither of them expecting that she would jump."

When you switch to Elliot's POV, the tenses get mixed up. It starts in present tense, and than it's past tense. It's confusing. But that's just part of the typo/grammer department. Shame to me for bringing it up again.

"Touching the bottom of the stairs, he walked out into the courtyard"

would probably sound better if touching became reaching.

The part where he sees her hand is a bit awkward, and when he's walking down the beach. It's 'he he he'. Overuse of any one word makes the word seem really irritating after awhile.

"Her face was a beautiful oval shape, her lips were not as full as a full-grown woman, and her clothes clung to her body revealing she has but a few more years to become a woman also"

is a bit awkward. I'm not sure how you could rephrase it though.

"He wondered how she came about the scale. Wild dragons rarely meet humans or even help them for that matter"

Again, the sentence structure and word choice is awkward. "Wild dragons rarely helped humans," "Wild dragons rarely met humans" or "Wild dragons rarely helped humans, or even met them, for that matter" sound better because helping is a bit more personal than meeting, and you're making it sound impersonal by adding the "or even...for that matter."

After that, there are a lot of places where word choice or sentence structure was awkward, but I'm not going to go into that right now.

But don't be disheartened by this long and critical review! I wouldn't take the time to write this if I didn't think the story didn't have potential--it does. But you could improve on it. So take heart, revise, and don't be afraid to post said revision.

Love! Keep writing!