Reviews for Pha'dora: Green Eye, Blind Eye

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faery tragedy 2008-06-24 ch 44,	abuseAH! You're back! I'm ecstatic. I have to admit, I had to re-read some of the last chapters to plunge back into the new one. Anyway. The comparison to corpses was macabre. And not just because they resembled corpses, but because strange, masked mummers are sort of mythical and creepy to begin with. The first scene is totally palpable with suspense. I can't say exactly what it is--a mixture of hurried dialog, concise but perfect descriptions, the point when she forgets her mask...I've said it before, but you have outstanding talent, a way of controlling your prose so finely and beautifully that it seems easy to read as thoughts. Or pictured like a movie. Naphtali, sort of playing a mischievous Merlin character, always has such epic dialog. I think you mean to capitalize Merrow about 3/4ths the way down. Another confession: I'm a little lost with all the political intrigue. It's not because of lack of clarity on your part, but just because you've been away for awhile. Maybe a quick author's note would help? *faery tragedy
faery tragedy 2008-03-17 ch 43,	abuseI'm sorry it's taken me so long to review! I've been so busy and irresponsible. Anyway, this chapter was good. The breaks seemed to move the story along effortlessly without feeling too contrived. I liked the "paid mourners" comment; it made me think of ancient Egyptians who paid people to mourn for their dead. It gave the chapter a mystical, ancient feel. I liked the description of the queen. I could picture her perfectly. The confrontation between Nichara, Naphtali, and Juhana was pretty intense. I think you wrote it really well and convincingly. I'm excited to see where you'll go with this, especially since it's so intriguing right now. *faery tragedy
faery tragedy 2008-02-14 ch 42,	abuseI like how you inject little details that show instead of tell, like the hoarseness of Calliope's voice. The talk between Naphtali and Nichara was certainly a bit...mysterious albeit surprising. You wrote the scene very well. It explained everything without giving everything away in a total frank, boring manner. "There is a little murderess in you" was such a great line! And the last line, like many of yours, certainly sets up a cliffhanger. I hope you write more soon! *faery tragedy
Satar 2008-02-13 ch 42, anon.	abusewell this chapter was certainly worth the wait, finally some light was shed on what the mummers are and who Naphtali actually is, all in all a great chapter! Can't wait for the next chapter!! things are really starting to come together now.
faery tragedy 2007-12-06 ch 41,	abuseWoo! A new chapter. I knew I could count on you :). The description of the physician blew me away. I expected you to mold her into the death-crone stereotype, but you didn't. Nice job. "Brushing past his wife..." was a precise simile, and it really worked there. Danikka's ignorance and stereotypes of the Marajan is neat too. I'm sure a lot of people can relate to being branded like that, and it shows what kind of superstitious people they are. Seren really gets on my nerves sometimes, but I guess that's what you intended lol. The latter part of the chapter was a little confusing, but I think the dream segment was sort of meant to be that way. Anyway, I don't have any complaints except that I hope you write more quickly! *faery tragedy
Melly 2007-12-01 ch 41, anon.	abuseyeah an update so happy :D but y does naphtali want to start a war? and is daniyel the one that is dying? u haven't and nachara interact with him in awhile Well anyway great chapter, u awesome writer ^.^
Satar 2007-11-30 ch 41, anon.	abusewow that was a very eventful chapter, im shocked nichara would speak out like that but i was totally cheering her on!! why did naphtali not speak?? i dont really see how thats wise, the situation could have turned out differently. no masks in the performance is a interesting twist and we finally get see what naphtali looks like!
ohthevoices 2007-11-30 ch 41,	abuseI'm looking forward to seeing how this is going to play out, whether they go to the Queen's court, anyway, or run away. And I like how the tension between Naphtali and the others is increasing.
ohthevoices 2007-11-24 ch 40,	abuseA few typos: "...her delicate-looking hands walling the eager child inside her mother’s protective circle." But I thought the child was a boy? "They had escaped the unpleasantness of damp ground and stones that stones that snagged the threads." Just a couple repeated words in here. "I’m not so all as these people..." = "tall" "Her knees make a dull cracking sound as she stood up again." Tense confusion = "made" Other than that, I didn't see anything. I hope you update again soon!
faery tragedy 2007-11-12 ch 40,	abuseI like how one of the themes is really cemented in this chapter. And it's a good theme at that. Your writing is strong and magical as usual. I'm glad you're continuing this! *faery tragedy
Satar 2007-11-08 ch 40, anon.	abuseinteresting chapter, it was nice to finally understand why the mummer's don't seem to respect naphtali just cuz he hasnt shown his face to anyone, though i hope soon you'll reveal who is he what is past is all about, he's just too darn mysterious..lol!
ohthevoices 2007-08-23 ch 39,	abuseHmm. It doesn't look like I ever reviewed this, but better late than never, I suppose. "Before they reached the wall, Naphtali gave haste instructions:" Do you mean "hasty instructions"?
faery tragedy 2007-06-28 ch 39,	abuseEnchanting bit about the spider. I'm wonder if there's an analogy involved and I'm not clever enough to get it! :) Great chapter, very mysterious. I enjoyed the "melancholy-tinged" adjective; I thought it was a lovely way to describe it. Homeric almost. *faery tragedy
satar 2007-06-03 ch 39, anon.	abusethat was an interesting chapter, i wonder if Naphtali is really merrow or not. im curious about whats under the mask and why was it Juhana who saw him? hope hte next chapter is soon!!
melly 2007-06-03 ch 39, anon.	abuseaah!! i want to know want naphtali looks like. anyway i know i have to wait :( great chapter! a huge cliffhanger (it's hurts the soul u know) update asap please ^.^

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