I did enjoy-- very much!

You paint a lovely picture of creation here. What goes through each artist's mind when doing anything demiurgic. How to make it better/different/unique.

And yes, what mankind in general NEEDS to think about doing. But instead they continue to vomit out more and more mind-numbing devices to kill the human spirit and virtuosity.

We live in a silicon age...everything ones and zeroes. Where are the masters of old? The men of true brilliance and vision, acumen and percipience?

Ah, well...guess we have to wait for a higher authority to fix things in due time...till then, selfishness and technology reigns (or ruins) supreme... while Chimera watches.

The piece itself was technically perfect. (sounds almost ironic in context, doesn't it?)

So how did you do in the contest?

it's obvious to me you try very hard to write a good story, however, your descriptiveness, being wholly good is marred by your lack of talent at forming proper sentences and paragraphs.

This is grammatical, you are not unintelligent, but rather a gem covered by layers of hardenned opaque crusts seriously needing to be washed off. With some decent training in the use of language, you may find yourself surprised by how much you could improve.

if you can help it, never start a sentence with 'And'.

Alan.

Lovely. Your day spent researching Raku pottery was well spent, the very scientific terms blended well with the rest of the descriptions and gave it an extra dimension. Or something to that effect. =] Keep writing!

wow o.o. that was very cool.