Reviews for The Jewellery Box

Reviews For: The Jewellery Box

Pheobe Meryll 2006-05-14 ch 1,	abuseSuch a sad ending...I love this little story. It's really touching, and the descriptives are beautiful especially in the last paragraph. And it's great how you used an inanimate object so powerfully.
Autumn Descending 2005-07-01 ch 1,	abuseJust beautiful Tawny!
Lonely Forest 2005-06-26 ch 1,	abuseTruly moving story. Excellent piece of fiction. I really enjoyed reading it.
The Lark Ascending 2005-06-06 ch 1,	abuseExquisite imagery! This really touched a chord in my heart, which is what you intended I'm sure - congratulations on a job well done.
Wicked Witch Krandomity 2005-05-31 ch 1,	abuseOh, my gosh, this is so sad! You have an awesome writing style. This story had an interesting feel to it, like black velvet, if you know what I mean (probably not, I don't make a whole lot of sense to most people). Well done. Happy Writing! ~W.W.Krandomity
Nobody-n-Particular 2005-05-22 ch 1,	abuseSweet and endearing. It can often be the smallest trinkets, the little things in life, that are constant to reassure.
ShadoWings 2005-05-20 ch 1,	abuseNice piece of writing. I think, just maybe, a tad more description could have been added to this, but despite that, this was good. In fact, it was great. Maybe there's a moral to this one-shot, and if there is I'd like to guess it? I think that it's about how something you've had for so long in your life, filled with inspiration and memories, can soothe you to complete calmness. In this case, the girl was looking for some sort of comfort, and she found that comfort within the music and the spinning ballerina. All in all, this was beautifully written. Sentences weren't too short or weren't too long because simplicity works really well, too. Some of the lines in this story caught my attention as well. Great work.
Misinterpretted 2005-05-16 ch 1,	abusewell that was perfectly splendid. Everyone has that one object that helps me, sadly for me its a doll i've had since I was one..lol oh well it was totally awesome and I loved it. Keep up the good work!
pinky 2005-05-16 ch 1,	abuseWow. I'm speechless, honestly. That was just...wow. I got transported right into the story, like I could actually see everything that was happening. Honestly, in my mind's eye, the girl looked like me. I had one of those jewelry boxes when I was little, but then I pulled the ballerina out and lost it... Anyway, I loved the descriptiveness, and it had such a real feel about it, where all of this possibly could happen, and probably has somewhere before. Seriously, great job. Absolutely fantastic. Thanks so much for reviewing, "Food for Thought," it meant a lot to me!
account not in use 2005-05-16 ch 1,	abuseI love the way the music transported back to littlegril land, where everything was a-okay. Very sad, and very sweet. By the last paragraph, you ahd me crying. Some of your sentances are a bit long, though. Nothing horrid, but you may want to fix them up a bit.
Have left fictionpress 2005-05-16 ch 1,	abuseI enjoyed this story. You've managed to pack an awful lot of feeling into it, regardless of its length. Speaking of length, this won't be very long as I'm supposed to be revising for history... First of all, you need to vary your sentence length in the first paragraph. By the second paragraph, you've got the hang of it, but in the first all of your sentences are too long, although broken up by commas. Normally I'd point out the bits where you could put full stops, but time is short and you can probably do that by yourself anyway! Your portrayal of the music is beautiful: its lingering quality and the way it rises and falls and calns the girl, even when she's a teenager. The device of the box holding memories and transporting the girl to a different time, when she was happier, is effective and one that can strike a chord (no pun intended!) with most girls, who've probably had a music box, or a jewellery box like the one you've described, at some point in their lives. Lastly, you need to fix the spelling of 'jewellery' throughout the piece. You got it right in the primary title!
Aibari 2005-05-16 ch 1,	abuseIt's simply beautiful!
Uke Goddess 2005-05-16 ch 1,	abuseThis was really a pleasure to read. Very well-written and descriptive in emotion. Well done! ^-^

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