The opening was good. I liked your development of the battle, although it seemed a bit too mild. Every time I read a historical fiction of D-Day, I think 'Saving Private Ryan' and how graphic it was - how realistic. You created a good fiction, but it was missing realism - almost like watching a war movie on mute, it didn't seem like Werner was actually under attack until the rocket killed his partner.

But I'm just nitpicking - you are a talented author, and I hope you'll keep writing in the future.

Fantasticly written. I'm a huge fan of World War II, and I've been really waiting for someone to take the view of the Germans. No critism to offer you; it's rare, but it happens :p

Very good imagery in this short piece.

Poor Werner. All in all this is well written.

Good Job! *_*

Nicely Done! Well written, tense, and nice use of adjectives. I like the non-hollywood ending, but didn't I see the part about "letting him burn" in "Saving Private Ryan"? Otherwise, most excellent!

Ooh, great. Nice use of words. I have terrible problems actually writing stories. I have the plot idea and everything, then I'm stuck.

This is the best action sequence I've read recently on this site. The moment is captured and rendered perfectly in this passage. It was a absorbing with vivid description that conjured up the desired imagery. Congratulations on writing a great piece.

Good grief! That was...something! I admit I wasn't quite sure what to make of the ending at first, but I liked how you captured D-day through the view of a German soldier. And you certain portrayed the horrors of war very realistically.