Great story! It has some wonderfully witty moments and is very entertaining.

There are a few things I would say though. You main characters Danny and Adam are very young for their age behaviouralwise (is that a word?). Also loads of your charaters are stereotypes. I found the klutz who cries all the time is a bit OTT. Also the triplets are really annoying (and I don't mean that in a good way) they're annoying as in 'stupid' annoying. Their comic value isn't worth the hassle so I'd say that if they don't play some crucial role in the plot then drop them to up the overall rating of the piece.

I'd like to see the prequel to this because, while youse obviously know the twins, as a reader I don't so they sort of come across as being a bit one-dimensional. I like Judy though, she seems like someone you could work on, I'd like to find out more about why she's so nasty to Danny.

I've just re-read my review and it seems overly negitive. I didn't mean it to be. I actually enjoyed your story as light reading and I'll be on the look-out for up-dates soon.

Stick with it,

Galleena