I really like it. It's easy to want to stay in one moment of time. To just want to continue on in that moment. But if we did that, then we would never learn any thing. I thought you wrote this very well.

Honest, just say what you feel from your heart. This is grad for 8th grade? So this is fine.

nice poem, very honest and heartfelt. great work, i think its near perfect ^-^

It's kind of funny how you said 'wishes don't always come true' and then you said 'I can only hope my wishes will come true someday'. Other than that, I think the whole thing is great. It has a lot of emotion and feeling in it. I don't think there's much you can change. Then again, what do I know? XD

haha, no...no...seriously, stick with the footprints poem. -ADD

i dunno i dont rlealy liek the ending... id delete the last stanza & jsut end with I wish... the repition is great & we can call relate.. id also put something in parenthesisin the other stanza to make it fiut it better

I can't think of anything really, I can see a definte maturity with your style and the word use, format but I can also see a few things that could be erased. ^^; O_O; Never mind, just me. -_-; XDD I liked it, again a beautifully written poem and really heartfelt and honest.

!~* noelle *~!

Beautiful start. I would add some wishes that involve the future and wishes for your friends success, etc. manuel.