This is great, but so sad! Amazingly well written. :D

damn! wow...this is good...really good...really really...okay maybe excellent is the word? yea, excellent is a good word. the diction was, wow, flawless...the descriptions, the event on which the story is built...it's gripping, heart-wrenching and just...excellent:) it's really sad though, but it's a real story, as in it shows reality, 'cause not every story can have a happy ending...i really love it:)

Sad!

This was very very amazing. I have to admit, after reading this, I was damn near tears. You offered just the right amount of everything in this, and I really do dislike one-shots, but this has convinced me otherwise. Seriously, great job. I'm looking forward to reading your other stories.

When the bridge was introduced in this story, I knew it couldn't end up well! This story was incredibly sad but it was also incredibly well-written. I loved it. I think the destroyed picture at the end was wonderful symbolism.

Cassandra

Thank you.

Your narration style is very lovely. It uses beutiful descriptions, but not in excess, so it was still easy to follow.

I liked your metaphor at the end, as well. It was very powerful.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. It was a refreshing read after the run-of-the-mill romances you generally find on this site.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

That was extremely sad, and my eyes are all puffy. You have such a great talent, you are such a great writer, all in all, your stories have painted vivid pictures in my mind, vivid, like vivid vivid. haha, it almost makes me feel like i should run to my old bestfriend, who I spent most of my childhood with until we became teens and I moved away, and hug him and tell him how much he meant to me, how vital it was that I knew him when I was little. This piece(if i should even call it that) has touched my heart. so much.!
ashlyn

Oh...

that was tragic, the ending...
i feel like crying

aw... that was sad... i was almost crying by the end... thanks for the review by the way, muchly appreciated

Oh my gosh... That was really beautiful... I swear I'm crying right now...

You have such a wonderful writing style. It reminds me of those olds black&white movies wehre everything was fuzzy at the edges, and no mattwer what has happening, everything was soft adn ethereal... I loved it. It was so vivid, and the emotions were so heartbreaking...

Yeah, I LOVED it.

aw, this was so depressingly beautifull... i love the way you wrote it, how simple it was, but how much meaning it held. very emotional.

thank you for reviewing on my story! im new at this and will definitly take your advice!-elska

This was a nice, simple piece. I liked the peaceful, almost drowsy start that gave it an air of calm... however, I think I would have had more time to contemplate his death(?) if you had delved deeper into the girl's emotions regarding his death... there could be more than love and grief, for example, there could be guilt, or the desperate feeling of being truly alone- a feeling she has obviously never experienced before.

Anyway, if you had stretched out the feelings of grief etc. then the reader, or maybe just me personally, would be able to really feel what the girl herself is feeling more, and would also see the death of the boy more realistically.

Does that make sense? Lol, it makes sense when it's in my mind... and of course, I take into consideration this is a one shot, and there's only so much one can pack into a short story... but the above was just a suggestion and my personal opinion, you need not take heed :o)

Over all, I found this a nicely written piece; I loved your style.

Cheers and be sure to keep writing,

eyesofahuntress

good imagery

Wow.

That was fantabulous. It just all flowed so well, and then the ending... *happy sigh* It was a great read. I'm glad I checked it out.

I suppose since this is a R100 review I should do some CC, so I'd suggest switching perpetually and were. Otherwise, wonderful.

And happy birthday!