Ahh and so the plot thickens! And I can't find anything grammatically wrong! ;]

Hmm... Monday, not monday. And I think it should be 'go to' rather than 'go and.' Other than that, good! And the little bit at the end... hehe. Talking to characters is fun. Now, when you introduce characters, you might want to incorporate the "show, don't tell" method. Don't tell us what they're wearing, but show us. For instance, you can add something like, "her fluffy rainbow-colored socks peeped through the holes in her glaringly orange pants" or some such.

Interesting. There are a few typeos that you might want to go back and fix. Also, for the next chapter, you might want to research some things about depression - what people do. Since your MC lost someone dear to her, it's going to have some pretty ill effects, especially since it happened right in front of her. She might even consider suicide - just keep all the options open. Some people who are depressed sleep a lot or very little. Luck and have fun!

Even though it's short, I really like the beginning - it's very intriguing. Ah, and please don't shoot me, but I'm going to be a tad bit of a grammar nazi - instead of "try and" it should be "try to."