Even though its a prologue, you wrote it in a very interesting and captivating way. ^^ Great description too, looking forward to the next chapter. @_@ must find out killer...

Hey Peace. I'm finally off the summer and now I can get more reviews in ^_^ So far, so good. I love the way that your stories are nicely descripted, and your prose is really fluent and wonderfully executed. I think that this is a different kind of genre then you're normally used to, and I think that it's admirable that you're writing out of your regular field of storytelling. This was really good, and I hope that my reviews can suffice for the wonderful reviews that you give out to me. Anyways, we didn't see much dialogue here yet, but I think that the action is probably going to pick up pace once you get this story started. I think that you presented this wonderfully, and I found myself loving every minute of it. Wow, you've definitely got a lot of talent on you, and I hope that you keep the great work up!

Heather

I thought that if the rest of the story is going to be like that first chapter, than publish it! A wonderful description of the town, with a blood-chilling end to the chapter, beckoning the readers into the rest of the story.All in all, I'd give it a thumbs up.

I like the way this was presented. Seriously. It started out sounding like one of those film-noir detective stories. Which are my guilty pleasures. I have no doubt that you will get this published. There isn't much I can say besides that I'm impressed and I truly enjoyed this.

-Yin

Shi: and you yelled at me for ending my chapter in a murder.OOMM: ... ya know, I have to side with Shi on this one. Either way, good chapter. Although it was a prolouge. I can't wait to see more of Mrs. Sally Dean, if you remember what I mean hehe. In any case, keep up the writing.Power to the Hikari's

Hey Peace! So, you're trying out a new genre, huh? Well, I have to admit that it's a very good first try. Your story has very good pacing and a smooth flow that allows it to be easily digested. It also has a good hook to keep the reader coming back. Your descriptive power is dead on (uh...no pun intended) and is neither too much or too little. Not much in the way of character development or dialogue yet, but with these kinds of stories, you want to take your time to get everything developed just right. And I'm sure that you'll come up with something thought-provoking as it is devious. All in all Peace, I liked it alot! Keep up the good work and update it when you can! Oh yeah, thank you for reviewing 'slashDANCE fUtUrE' and I'm glad that you liked it as much as you did. I hope that you enjoy the next installment when I get it up and posted. Well, laters...

Terryll Preston, still2twisted of FictionPress fame...