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| Widom 2005-07-01 ch 1,  | abuseFree form...okay, nicely done. On another note...*screams* Ah, the honesty! It burns! My god, sometimes life just sucks when somebody actually figures it out. *grumbles* Did I forget to mention that I like this greatly? |
| B. M. Reed 2005-06-17 ch 1, | abuseVery true...I like this a lot. |
| Grape 2005-06-06 ch 1, | abuseHey! I liked the poem, it was really good, it showed us a different part of being a celebraty..something that not many people see, or wish to see. Good Poem! |
| aquascum 2005-05-21 ch 1, anon. | abusethis is sad/ish... & ur right, poetry doesnt hav 2 rhyme or fit a guidlines, if tht was tru id neva b able to rite any poetry, i suc @ followin rules...this was really good Elli*+* |
| Cookie Gestapo 2005-05-19 ch 1, | abuseIf it's any consulation your poetry is... wonderful. I love it because it seems so real. It hits the emotion and feeling on the spot. No it dosent scream emotion but it whispers it (do you get that? Probly not V_V) None the less your good...no great at what you do and this is your work of art people don't have the right to complain about it. They can comment on it, they can say how you can make it better. But they canot, do not have the right to complain. But maybe I'm biased because I simply love all of your posted work. |
| aeolyn 2005-05-19 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful! I love the concept behind the poem and the way everything flows so well. Love the lines "It’s for the best that they can’t see/How pathetic you’ve turned out to be./It’s for the best that they can’t see/How alone you really are" and the way it flows and rhymes. Great job! |
| pneumothorax 2005-05-19 ch 1, | abuseIt's stylistically quite simple and parts seem to rhyme: "Lights surround you …Duty calls yet again.You know that all of this won’t last for long,But for now it’s nice to pretend" This sounds good because, whilst the poem doesn't rhyme - why are you defensive about that? some do.. some don't. You don't have to defend yourself :) - it sounds good when read. You involve the reader well through the use of 'you' although overall, it seems quite naïve. |
| Spector'sGirl 2005-05-19 ch 1, | abuseEven though your poem didn't have a consistent rhyme scheme or meter, it was stylistically the same throughout which is, at least to me, more important. Did you write this with anyone specific in mine? Its really sad - but you didn't go over the top with a million adjectives to make it so. |
| PikaNaNoDa 2005-05-19 ch 1, | abuseThis one is my favorite out of your poetry as of now. And I should really leave your poems alone before I end up writing. |