AW! it was really cute. i liked it alot, the end seemed a little rushed, but it fit. so yeah.

That was really sweet! But I have a problem with it. First off, it's obvious this is a total parody of Harry Potter, especially since you get James' name mixed with Harry's at one point. Other than that, I have no problems.

You should write a sequel!

Wow! that was awesome! Write! write! write!

that was really good! im such a sucker for corny :) write more stories!

Ok, there is no such language as British. There are far too many bloody's in here. I get they are supposed to be English, you don't need to keep ramming it down someones throat. Not everyone that is English uses the word bloody. What's the obsession with Saturday papers?

Flight time between London and Paris is about an hour so it is very unlikely that anyone will be getting jetlag. You tend to get jetlag on a longhaul flight 5hrs+.

Also you call the paper Saturday London Times and Saturday England Times, you should stick to one or the other. However you there aren't currently any National Newspapers with England in the title as they cover the whole of the UK (England, Northern Ireland, Scotland and Wales) even if they do tend to be england-centric. The only papers that have the day of the week in the title is the Sunday Papers.

There does seem to be rather too many bloody hell's. You could put a damn in there to break things up.

Finally some of the names seem a bit unusual for English people. You should look at a baby name site that does popular babies names by country.

Very finally if you've got to the bottom of this. I do like this story I think it is very well written apart from the things I have pointed out.

I just read the whole story in one night. It's great! I didn't notice anything wrong, but that was probably because I was so into the story. It was really nice, and good luck in the future.

Malak

That was a sweet story.

BBYD

Very cute! I loved it! And, you updated so quickly which was good. I hope to see more of your stuff soon.

AA

Hello was this once a harry/ginny fanfic?because you accidently put ginny and harry once and marley is like molly and the twins is fred and george and remington is ron and harmony is hermonine it just kept buggin me the story is good ( im still a h/hr shipper) keep up the good work

This was such a cute story! I really enjoyed it. =) If you want someone to fix the grammar and spelling, I'd be happy to do it. I suck at writing but I can grammar-a-cize.

hEy! That was great! total awesomeness!

very sweet ending to that story. Again i noticed more harry-ing. But other than that its another well wrighten story. Its short, dramatic, funny and very romantic. Thanks for the awsome read! ^__^ ~Wisdoms

Very Good Story. I did notice in a few places. I think in five places. That you said Harry. And in one or two places i think you called jenny...ginny. Did you start it as a Harry Potter fic, then change your mind? It doesnt matter though, because i understood your story perfectly. oh, i couple of misspelt words here and there. But everyone messes of words once and a while. Very good other wise. Cant wait to read Part 2. ~Wisdoms