  Trevor 2007-04-11 . chapter 5 Chapter one of Heiress: I kinda liked it. i wouldnt be reading it if it wasnt my girlfriend's. but there was one party i perticularly enjoyed, Jon's stupidity in discussing sex with Jenelle. what i ddint like was there angery that was kinda portrayed in the first frew sentences. and the father daughter realationship between the king and Jenelle. maybe she has siblings...
Chapter 2: eh. Jon isnt a gripping character. *likes Jenelle though*
Chapter 3: *figured out why he didnt like the father daughter realationship* Nice one tera nice. Aw, Jon's got a **. The king sucks. Jon is getting better. and as i said earlier *likes Jenelle*
Chapter 4: Damn plot twist. I was enjoying only seeing the lover and the loved side. but no go and put the enemies schemes into play. *hates dramatic irony* (actually sometime i LOVE it) *but not now!*...Never mind. You didnt even let my anger festure Tera. *has mixed emotions* WOAH WOAH WOAH! Battle now? what just happened? Jon is cooler now. He is thinking!! YAY!
Chapter 5: he is like a 5 year old. or a guy. good boy. Well. Jon learned. I think it ended on a good note. and the ending is a little obvious. so. all in all, not best seller. but it is ok.
*is not a stalker* |
| tastyafcewash 2005-11-20 . chapter 5 i shall bo him for you.
bo.
dick weed.
clapclapclapclap for jon though! AND UPDATE DAMMIT |
  Riku Matsuki 2005-10-17 . chapter 5Jon...*eyes glaze over in happiness* [ed: FOREST! *whacks*] Right...uh..
CHAPTER! I didn't review it before *whaps self* amazing, Jon is quite clever and SWORDS YAY!
UPDATE **!
HAPPY BIRTHDAY |
| hobosam 2005-07-01 . chapter 4 AW nice chapter. i love how you made her...er...argue...with a crystal.. |
| hobo sam 2005-07-01 . chapter 3 la de damn, nice chapter. :) aw you should have made them kiss! and tell matt to shut up. |
| hobo sam 2005-07-01 . chapter 2 HA! i read your fight with matt..um, hun, torv wouldnt stop reading your stories if you PAID him. :) but, we love you anyways. and so does torv. and great chapter. |
| hobo sam 2005-07-01 . chapter 1 awesome **. i love how you used the word "hot" and how you made him in boxers. no, really though, its great and i love! |
 clair-a-net 2005-06-24 . chapter 4so who is this angel of death and what did she and jenelle talk about that stressed her so. keep up the good work cant wait to see what happens next.
i understand about the taking a while to update. i started summer school a little while ago and now have to time to write at the moment, bearly have time to read. like now im supost to be studying for a calc test but i figured this would give me a good weel deserved break. hope to be reading more from ya soon |
| Riku Matsuki 2005-06-23 . chapter 4 YAY! You know what Pie would say if he could get out of the closet. lovely. lovely, lovely, lovely. ha! |
| Riku Matsuki 2005-06-03 . chapter 3 Everybody say, "Aw!" It was beautiful, Tera, dear. |
| alianne 2005-06-01 . chapter 3 fyi "tera", you never refer to a princess as 'your majesty'. that's only for kings and queens. a princess would be 'your highness'. luv ya! |
| clair-a-net 2005-05-31 . chapter 3 This is good. i wonder what is going to happen. write more please. clair_a_net |
| Torv 2005-05-23 . chapter 2 Well it was good. I think it could use a little more about Jon. But it still has my attention. I think it's good. you still need to describe the characters better. Other than that it's good. Bravo |
| Riku Matsuki 2005-05-23 . chapter 2 Wonderful, sweetiekins, there is that better? You're so talented. huggle |
| Torv 2005-05-22 . chapter 1 That's it?!?! No second chapter! or am i being stupid and can't find the bloody chapter?
Anyway... the review...
It was pretty good. Kept my attention. I enjoyed the story line how ever there is room for improvement. If you finished it maybe i could give a real reveiw!
Sheesh...
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