I love Rae's character so far she is funny and I love how she is so cheerful and stubborn at the same time.

This is a good chapter and I love the name Ravensqualio! I also like how you described the biology teacher. What does the R stand for?

This is good but in the part about Corbin "He was no longer the social, little good boy he was before, he became what the school, his use-to-be friends, and even himself, as a ‘Goth’." I think it should be called a 'goth' instead of as a Goth.