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| Rozovian G 2005-05-24 ch 1,  | abuseWell well... This is cool. There's a lot of metaphors you could make this into. The one I thought of was, though your God comment is more disturbing in that interpretetation, sin. Sin dying over and over again, and somehow managing to come back to life within our human nature and the whole deal of fighting it claiming all time and... so on. Sure, there are other interpretations as well. It could be a disliked side of one self, or a piece of personal history one doesn't wnat to have. Or it's a horror tale about some pathetic creatuire that's too stubborn ot stay dead. Interpretations. Gives it far mroe depth than the story in itself, which, for that matter, ain't bad. Great job! |
| Red Masque 2005-05-23 ch 1, anon. | abusepretty nice :) in some places it seemed a little overdone ("lecherous, gangrel being" is a nice image, but a bit obtuse for many readers), but all in all a nice piece rm |