I enjoyed this poem. I liked the descriptions, it made vivid pictures in my head. Nice.

Hey!

Great vocabulary, great feeling and passion, and great use of visionary words. I call them that, because they always bring up a vivid image in your mind. I think my favorite part was where it rhymed. Because I always feel that it gives it power. But it can kill the poem, too. It's a balancing act. But I think you did a wonderful job and I hope you keep at it!

Luv ya,Tashi :)

wow i'm speech less. o.k. maybe not. i hope you know your name is at the bottom. wonderful work. :)

Beautiful. You created wonderful imagery and a good sense of pain. I really enjoyed reading this, I especially loved these lines:Oil raindrops fall from a sky thus cloudedWith all your childlike fearsAnyways, good poem and good luck writing in the future.