So have I, betrayed by what I trusted for so long... it hurts.

Nah, not pathetic. Awesome. You made it to my favorite authors list in just 2 poems. YAY!

Sheer and plain, the lack of details make most readers hard to relate and connect to the poem in a deepr level other than the shallow surface. Furthermore the rhythm, which is considerably the most important aspect of poetry, is also seems to be left out.

Overal acceptable for a short 1 min read poetry.

Yeah, I really liked it. I guess I feel like I can really relate to it. It's a really great poem.