Wow! You can express the feeling into words that makes it like it's really true, quite a talent you got there. I hope you keep writing more ^^

I FOUND YOU! Took me long enough, till I thought to search for "Lily Rose"... before that I was trying Kian & Rhys. Anyway, I found you, and I know it's you because I've read this and loved it, so yay!

the last line is my favorite. i like how you emphasized the word "sliding" to make the poem end on a solid note. good description!

I especially like how you have some words in bold. Adds a great sense of emotion it it. Great job.