Can't believe I didn't read this before. It's nice, I really like it. You always do a good job on what you write. Keep up the great, awesome work.

I updated deadly games and replaced the an with chapter four, so I don't think an update would show up in your review history.

Whoa, nice storytelling. That Akan seemed like a real dirtball. Wow, have I been lazy lately.

that's great! he got his comeuppance, hurrah! It's well written, though there are a few bits in the beginning description that he wouldn't have said, like not looking at the play of the light on the trees...but anyway, good story!

Ha! Comeuppance! Serves the b*d right! And well done to his little brother, too. :D