Wow... its awesome

the way you write . . . it's just so easy (for me, anyway) to visualize what inspired this. it's not an easy thing to deal with, and i like the way you explained that at the end. very nice :)

your back after almost a month of break. I've seen better extended metaphor poems, however they're EXTREMELY hard to pull off. So 10 for the effort. -ADD

My comment to you as an author reviewing your poem is, I'm JEALOUS! WHERE THE FECKING HECK DID YOU GET THOSE GENES THAT MAKE YOU SUCH A BLOODY GOOD WRITER AND POET?!?!?!?!?! My comment as a friend who was just arguing with you twenty minutes ago via IM is, I HATE YOUR GUTS!

i like this one...the meter is alomst like a sick and twisted nursery rhyme...i can imagine little children singing this with weezing breath in between...but thats just my perception from my dark and thwarted mind...i know the pain you feel...the physical, the mental and the spiritual...just hang in there...cyanide