a very abrupt ending which seems so fitting to this poem, i like the beginning too because it's like a build up, and then i like the end because it has a nice structure to it and just suddenly ends, like a life would suddenly end, very well portrayed with a hell of a lot of feeling in it x weasel within x

p.s. glad you liked the poem!

Wow, powerful format. Leaves one breathless.

I'm speechless...this is so haunting, so beautiful...very well-written. Great Job!

Very well written and very shocking! I love it!

This is really moving. The first few lines are really original and the rest is so beautiful. Keep up the good work! queenvixta

I reall liked that one it was really deep keep up teh good work

Okay since it means alot for people to read and review, I thought I'd review. Oh I read it first. You've read some of my stuff, and I've read some of your stuff. Anyways, it means a lot to me also, if you don't go through with suicide. Yes, you don't know who I am, yes I am a christan. AND I've gone through something like this. Sorta still am, but I'm doing good. Anyways, you don't know me and I don't mean to freak you out, but I care about chu. And I'll be praying for you, even if you don't want me too. You are free to email me if you want. Well, I hope to read more from you. Be strong!

GWS

I'm-impressed. It takes a lot to convey this feeling without sounding like a whining, dramatic brat. Stamp of approval! Flows well, and, MOST IMPORTANTLY, makes me sad. Isn't that what poetry is? Emotion?

I loved the countdown! EXCELLENT IDEA! Very unique and this poem really stand out from other suicide poems. Absolutely amazing!

OMG that's just amazing. Hauntingly beautiful. I love it how you can describe everything so perfectly and yet still rhyme. I envy that. I don't see anything at all that needs to be worked on.

-Much love and support-

An interesting start, I can understand where the thoughts would come from. Just know that everyone would miss you, I woudl be very sad myself, you are such a great person and I love seeing reviews from you every week.

You can email me any time okay.

Keep it up.

I love this!

This is so sad. It's beautifully written though. Please read "cutter" and "a continuous fight" you can stop. Keep writing. You write beautifully

aww that's sad but really good i really like it you're very talented keep writing 4 eva and always *HUGS*

ScArRED HeArT

I see I haven't reviewed this one yet, so here it goes _

I think it's a beautiful poem, you've captured those steps to suicide very well. I also LOVE that last line, I think it says so much about the reason that the person you're talking about in this poem is commiting suicide...So yeah, basically I really love this poem, but I seriously pray to god that you won't ever try this yourself. You're way too good of a person and I'm so sure that suicide isn't your fate. Trust me on that one ok?

Much love, Rosanna.