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a lonely september 2006-03-26 . chapter 1
once again your detail astounds me. . . brilliant.
Moonjava 2005-08-16 . chapter 1
Wow, I love you're vocabulary use.
FantasizedMusic 2005-08-05 . chapter 1
As usual, you've taken the normal and blurred the lines to make something artistic and powerful. You've always had a gift for bringing out more than what most people see. Wonderful repetition throughout. It's really refreshing to find repetition that's done for a reason, not because a writer cannot think of anything else to say. Your wording is better than ever, and you used it not as a show off, but merely as a channel to tell your message. There's a lot more I could say (using Icarus, a Greek mythological figure, or where the musical aspect meets the literal in the worn guitar). Really wonderful work. This goes onto my favorites.

(This is PainKiller, btw, on a new pen name.)
Taka and Keichirou 2005-07-22 . chapter 1
interesting...nice use of vocab.T
dusk orchid 2005-07-22 . chapter 1
Stunning. The references to mythology was a wonderful touch to this along with the prospect of guitar playing. Wonderful piece. I'm taken with this one.
Xavier Everett 2005-06-11 . chapter 1
I like this. Especially the first line. "I flew on the wings and wills of Icarus" - wonderful. Your poems flow really well. Good job. Keep writing.

Xavier
linaeve 2005-05-30 . chapter 1
quite lovely; the metaphors with Icarus and music in general were very effective and beautifully executed.
Manuel Fajar 2005-05-30 . chapter 1
Upon five strings all life chromatic plays,

In seven related modalities,

So strange how music's accidents came forth,

We know that many have tried to change them,

Reordered scales into different form,

Manipulated time and harmony,

Yet most of us find ample tradition,

Fulfilling with a vastness of choices,

Delighting all who venture in gardens,

Melodious in colors and flavors,

Creating voicings we may hear but once,

Enchanting melodies entrance red heart.

p.s. Your poem is absolutely wonderful. m
pneumothorax 2005-05-29 . chapter 1
Interesting metaphor - the ionian, and the Icarus story.

"i wish You would speak out bluntly for once rather than lacing each muted word"

I liked these lines. 'Your' with a capital to demonstrate godly respect? Or mocking? Interesting.

"incomprehensible, indiscernible, imperceptible" workes well. Nice alliteration and makes the reader separate the words up more.

Good poem, but from far my favourite. Almost too moral with the references of Icarus.
Arcane D. 2005-05-26 . chapter 1
beautiful, your the only person I can say that makes me actually enjoy reading long poems. Spoken from the heart and the metaphors here are truly excellent. -ADD
Eirien 2005-05-26 . chapter 1
Absolutely beautiful. Again I love your erudite and original images, which is one of the main strengths of your poetry. Great job here, especially the image of Icarus and the images from the field of music/ playing musical instruments. The situation sounds familiar to me, I often wish God would speak more clearly, and I had the same dilemma about which university I should attend ... (or whether my job was the right one to take etc).
simpleplan13 2005-05-25 . chapter 1
awesome awesome poem
poetic abortion 2005-05-23 . chapter 1
beatiful, all I can really say to descrbe this. I am almost numb at the after affect of this, its radiates of so much power and emotion. *shivers* lovely piece, really just profoundly done and has such an impact on the reader. ^_^ thank you very much for the kind reviews, you are so sweet. X3

!~* noelle *~!
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