I like this. Its beautiful. I think the imagery is amazing. I can see you 'crumpled', I can hear the man's 'wicked laugh'. I can see someone dancing, entranced by the rain, realizing that there is no difference in the rain and the tears. Only one thing confuses me, and thats the grave thing. Is this story about someone dying, or someone leaving you? You see, I thought at first it was the latter, with you saying he left you. But then the grave thing makes me think maybe he died and you feel betrayed. Either way, the poem is so full of raw emotion and beautiful scenes that I can't really say anything negative. I only envy your talent. Its amazing. Keep writing, and I hope everything has turned out ok. :).

Awe, this was such a beautiful poem! Though it felt kind of held back, but still...this is a piece to adore!

Wow, I can really feel the sadness here! Good job here. The language used here was quite good. I know it may sound strange, but I guess that this would be the type of poem written by someone who has experienced a heartbreak from a failed relationship... sorry if you're offended by what I say here since you've said that you wrote it after some personal things happening. I'm not being nosey or what... anyway, thanks again for your review. And yeah, I did left a review for one of your stories quite some time ago. Dunno if you received that...

very sad and expressive! i never thought you had such emotions! keep it up friend!

Whatever happened to you that made you write this, I can at least say that something good came out of the situation...I hope it was worth it...anyhow, I liked this, and I thought that it was ther perfect length. Also, it is evident that you put quite a bit of yourself into this. Keep writing!

Liked the line "for I am not a weak willed girl." This poem seemed to carry some raw pain and I felt the emotions. Layout was good. Luv Kaitx

This poem has some really good ideas (like the final verse; very beautiful)... but somehow (in my humble opinion), the imagery in general is lacking in power; I don't feel an "oomph" when I read it. It's good, but I think could be better. I guess I would've liked to see more links between tears and rain.

However, I don't think this is anything you need to worry about; every artist has less-than-stellar work, including myself. Even though we may know it's not our best, that doesn't mean the emotions shouldn't be expressed. I'm not an ultra-deep, gloomy poet 100% of time; I've got a lighter side, too, and sometimes this results in not-so-great poems (e.g. see "Futile Wishes"). But I post 'em up anyways; they needed to be said, just as you had to show your pain here.

Some smoothe rhythm for the most part and nice rhyme.

beautiful. very clean and sharp and serene. beautiful work once more!

great.really.i liked it.you can make it better by changing some of the lines to improve the meter and flow of the poem, like what swaggering curses suggested, but you don't have to. it's good the way it is. i personally don't change anything about my poems, because i think it's what i felt at that point in my life, and i wrote them without a desire for perfection. reading them now is like discovering myself once again. maybe you feel that way, maybe you don't. anyways, it was just a suggestion; you need not do it. again, good job! keep it up and keep writing!

A beautifully written poem, full of emotions and heartfelt feeling. I love the way you write, a graceful bout of wording.

Keep it up.

Thanks for reviewing.

The best part of this was the fact you didn't stay down, you stood up despite the downpour. So many poems I read are merely about how someone is feeling sad and how they are consumed. Just the simple act of standing up shows so much more strength and will that it is in of itself amazing.

I also enjoyed reading this! You have so much talent! Keep up the great writing!

This is a really good poem. I like it a lot.

hey! i love it. i am trying to keep away from angst...but...this is really good. kepp on writing and i hope life treats you better.

~*~Cheer Up, Smile and Open Your Heart~*~