violently horrifying

and well put

amazing

excellent. So full of anguish.

excellent book, excellent poem. (i stole his eyes and hid themin ripped condom wrappers) that was absolutely gorgeous.

-nikki

Woah.

I have Speak sitting on my shelf right now. And I think, this rendition [per se] was another truthful parallel, though, I think that this seems to be more thoutfully written than that -whole- chapter that she encounters him. Maybe because this is compressed, with many images. Thanks for the good read; I got it off Tuesday Child's favorites.

wow, quite disturbing, i must say, but beautiful at the same time!

Beautifully disturbing. Love it.

I missed the 'speak' novel reference first time round. With that in my head, it makes the scene from this far more memorable.

oh my, i loved this book, and i love this poem even more. it's really amazing. i love the last four lines.

every line is near to perfection. point blank as the summary indicates. love every line, all unique and filled with emotion. the ending is the most tragic, the halting of the whole poem.

!~* noelle *~!

Amazing. 'point blank. date rape.' It's awesome.

I have no words for this except extraordinary. I loved Speak and I can feel the book through this. Your style is absolutely marvelous. "(i stole his eyes and hid them/ in ripped condom wrappers)". That's genius. That's incredible. Way to go. And also awesome job getting your work published! I hope to order a copy. Great work.

-salt.

This is great. It has a lot of strong emotion.

you are too amazing for words//your poetry as well. the first line (every line, really) is perfection.

Okay, Nancy, here's how it goes down with me. It seems as if I'm finally finding people on this site who have more than the mindless "style" of the adolescent, but I'm still slightly disappointed for two reasons.

1) Where are the people who love life like I do? There's no joy in any of the (stylistically) better poems I'm reading on this site. Maybe it's the disillusioned hope of an "early-twenty-something" year old guy, but surely someone else is exultant in the mere fact of our humanity?

2)You seem to have mastered your own style of more modern poetry, but there are times where you want to be more structured and you're fighting it. The Wicca poem and the Trail of Tears poem are the two biggest examples of this I saw with you. Both I and the poem were practically begging you to fall into a regular meter or rhyme, but you didn't. Maybe I'm just old-fashioned.

Anyway, that's about it. Lines 3-7 were strongest in this poem.