For some reason, this poem brings me back to English Class...

Anyway, I love the words you used in this poem. On the first read, it was just like reading a story.

I like the idea of this. The wording is interesting, it makes me want to read more, but for some reason I just couldn't find the rythm. It kind of threw me off and made the meaning in the words harder to grasp. Have you read much of Yeats work? This reminded me of some of his.

Essence of Truth be bound to this dark wanderer whom finds forthright to struggle and control those demons within him... let us hope he does not loose the coming battles.

Swool. It reminded me almost of Grindel from Beowulf. I really like the new rhyme scheme. How you write it is different but in a better way. I also like the darkness you portray so vividly. Great job and keep it up.